While I'm in agreement with Tam, a good cat in the story always lends civility and tone, I agree with you more that you shouldn't force what you don't feel.
I had the bizarre thought that perhaps the whole story might begin with Charles' disappearance. "There was heard a cracking sound at the top of the stairs and, when young Charles' mother opened his bedroom door to investigate, she found neither hide nor hair of him. The only thing rather out-of place-was a distinctly sharp odour that, if nothing else, suggested to the mind the colour blue."
Time for good ol' Dad to figure it out and retrieve (or at least find) the boy as the story evolves. I know its too late and not my place, but wanted to pass it to you as an indication your story has my brain engaged anyway.
Grin!
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