Right! Pull yerself together Dench, stop all this shilly shallying and extract the digit, where was I?
You weren't - that is the whole point!
My trouble (like you only have one) in story telling is the different viewpoints needed and how to switch between them smoothly.
For instance, my instinct is to explain in detail how Plant gets the Hiltons (man and wife) up before the Guild council only to discover that the majority are favourably inclined towards them because they're decent folk who are helpful and generous and don't cause trouble for anyone else.
So Plant makes a show of accepting the majoritys view and releasing the Hiltons to return home having already arranged with the Assassins Guild to have them killed. That way Plants hands look clean and he eliminates what could have been a threat to him.
So, thats the background but in the meantime we've got a young lad who's been saved by a neighbour...
How, who, where does this fit in or does it become part 5 and we leave out the former to be explained later on, maybe by Stiv Preem the Assassin who the lad saves from the gibbet on Gallows Hill.
Alright but what neighbour and how come he manages to understand the lads peril by seeing the arrests and getting to young John in time to warn him not to go home.
Well the lad is sitting on a barrel by the dockside drawing a ship (remember that picture?)
and is invited into the captains cabin by a seaman. The captain had received word from a messenger boy sent by the neighbour.
John is dressed to look like a cabin boy and advised to use the name Timmy then despatched to another safe place, a laundry, carrying a bag of washing and warned to act like a street urchin not like some rich mans son.
So having got him safely out of the way for the moment, we discover that the Assassins Guild is in a state of turmoil because their council doesn't like killing a child and nobody wants to take it on because the family is well known and liked and such a killing will not pass without comment and quite possibly worse.
Besides which the Guild has already had enough of being at Plants beck and call and already decided to move further away into the country town at which they already own a property, a school, being a discrete training place for apprentice assassins.
So Tammy says I dont need any of that, theres no need for any explanations, the story continues from the point where John gets the warning and so takes to the streets and we go on from there.
Now I disagree. I think all the details are essential to give the bones of the story which is fleshed out by telling what Timothy does. I mean otherwise the story isn't believable, IMHO.
Cor! What an outburst I got from reading this out to her...she says I'm just wasting time when I should be writing the story!
What thinkest thou?
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