I think it was better and if I can recreate it I'll happily drop most of these tiles.
To sort of compensate for what was lost I spent more time explaining about the Hiltons and their enemy Plant but in making Timmy escape by ship to a point down river I killed off the previous thread that I think gave Timmy more believability and actual abilities.
I decided to cut out all the previous back story and move him up to the Barrier as fast as possible in order to enter the kingdom of the fey.
However when I mentioned Elgar and Edith's being from the west country I deliberately salted the mine thinking to possibly tie Timmy and them together and maybe move them back towards the Citadel to pick up the broken threads of the original story.
I really don't know what to do so I may use tiling to write both versions annd see what comes out best
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