There is nothing to criticise about this piece, Heather. Many people over-try in their writing, whilst the vast majority are hopelessly lazy in this day and age; the dam mobile-speak completely devoid of caps and punctuation, so unintelligible they actually need those little cave-drawings and hieroglyphs to give their digital sludge meaning.

I was a professional editor for many years as a "side-hustle". Clarity of communication is the primary purpose of the written language, and art is a distant second. You have a good handle on the former, already a rarity.

Unsolicited advice follows. Keep at it here. Never lose sight of clarity as the primary purpose, for art without meaning is just noise in any form. Enjoy the fact there is no spell-check showing up for you; fly freely without it. My only suggestion at this point is to post your musings as new postings rather than a "post-a-response" to an existing thread.

Keep at it as the mood strikes. Soon, the language will cease to be a trial and become a playground. That's what the written language is; a great big unlimited playground. Best of all, its free! GRIN!